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"Halloween 3" -Original Story- Part Three October 31st (2 of 2)

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Quietly opening the door to Angel’s house Michael watched her roommate walk into the kitchen area. Leaning his head to the de he stared at her for a moment, in a way she reminded him of his older ster. She was bent down looking in the refrigerator, as she began to stand straight he started up the stairway. As he reached the top landing he could hear her start up the steps. =========================

Opening her vitamin water Leah took a long drink as she climbed her stairs, hearing foot steps she stopped in front of the spare rooms dark doorway. Turning her head in an attempt to hear better she waited, the sound never repeated itself. The lence became unsettling, taking another p she began to make her way to her room. It was about time to jump in the shower, she needed to look perfect in her costume.=========================

Stepping out from the dark bedroom Michael watched as she disappeared into her room, slowly he began to walk forward. Turning his head to stare into her room he stopped momentarily, watching her place her drink on her counter and pull out a change of underclothes. Turning his attention to Angel’s room he took a deep breath.========================

Placing her phone on the charger Leah picked up her underwear and made her way to the restroom, tting the clothes on the counter she began to pull the bobby pins from her hair. Hearing rustling in another room she peaked around the corner, no one was there to claim responbility for the noise. Pulling off her shirt and pants she looked at herself in the mirror, standing in nothing more than a white tank top and pink boy-shorts she studied her body.The sound of something heavy dropping to the floor made her flinch, breathing deeply she peaked out from the restroom once more. Sending her heart racing into a frenzy her eyes stopped on a towering man holding a large knife standing in Laurie’s room staring ahead. Clasping her hands over her mouth she quietly let out a soft breathy cry, collecting her thoughts she slid down the wall and grabbed her pants. Touching the pockets she remembered her phone was lying on her bed connected to its charger, quietly mouthing a curse word under her breath she shook in fear.Hearing the man take a heavy footstep brought a tear to her eye, she looked around with no where to go. If she wanted to potentially make it to her phone she was going to have to let him walk past her, had he seen her? Laurie was only a few houses down, maybe she could make a break for it. It would be smarter to leave the house first rather than to call the police and let him know you were home. Not sure what this mans motives were she began to think about her belongings, none of them were worth her life.Hearing another footstep Leah realized she didn’t have long to hide herself, taking another look around the room she realized there wasn’t much to chose from. She was trapped. Noticing she was small enough to fit herself in the cabinet beneath the nk she quietly opened the door. Her nerves twitched with terrifying anticipation, feeling the need to scream she clasped her hands around her mouth. Tears began to flow from her eyes like a waterfall, her nose began to run making it hard to breathe. Slowly lifting her hands from her mouth she drew in a slow, quiet breath.Listening carefully for any gn he was close Leah sat in lence, to her disappointment she couldn’t hear anything. The footsteps seemed to have stopped, maybe he made his way down the stairs. He could ealy have stayed in Laurie’s room, there was a big posbility he hadn’t seen her. After all she hadn’t seen him until he made a noise, maybe now was a good chance to attempt her escape. Drawing in a deep breath and steadying her shaking hands she slowly began to open the cabinet door, quickly taking a look at her surroundings she noticed he was nowhere to be seen. All she had to do was make it to the doorway, that would tell her if he was still upstairs with her. ===================================

Watching as she crawled out of the cabinet Michael slowly took a step out of the bathtub. quietly studying her movements he tilted his head. With both feet planted firmly on the tile floor behind her he gripped his knife tight in his hand,===================================

Feeling someone watching her Leah peaked out from the restroom doorway, no one was in ght. Her spine tingled as the pressure of evil changed the atmosphere, a tear fell as she began to look behind her. With a loud scream Leah made eye contact with the white mask. Without enough room to stand in the door way Leah quickly crawled from the restroom and rose to her feet, her legs bean to move as quickly as her heart. Feeling him close behind her she began to cry out loud, reaching the front door she began to twist the lock.

With a low growl trapped in his throat Leah felt his forearm collide with her ribs, knocking the wind from her lungs she fell to the ground. Not letting the pain register on her brain Leah began to run for the back door, she could hear as he tore through her living room. Anything in his way was moved with power, and with no time to change her path Leah jumped over the couch. With her leg not fully clearing the sofa she fell to the wooden floor with a thud, quickly pulling herself to her feet with the support beam that started the kitchen wall she felt a gust of wind graze her back.

With a loud crack the knife stabbed through the wood, the blade protruded through the other de. Quickly Leah tried getting away from his reach, still she felt as his hand gripped her hair through the bar opening in the kitchen wall. Turning to stop his force with her arms she fought to stay away from the blade. His hand was pushing firmly on the back of her head, slowly inching her face towards the knife. Removing one hand from the wall she reached for their knife set on the counter, with her fingers grazing the handles her heart started to nk with defeat. Pulling away just enough to reach the small knife on the bottom of the wooden block she pulled it from its sheath, with a fighting scream she impaled his hand.Hearing him take a deep breath she watched his eyes grew with rage, viciously he slammed her to the ground. Feeling her spine collide with the tile of the kitchen floor she yelped in pain, glancing in his direction she could see him begin to pull the knife from the wall. This was her chance to escape from this house.Pulling herself up ung the counter she began to open the kitchen window above the nk, knocking the screen off with force she screamed out in help. Lifting her weight onto the counter she began to pull her body through the window opening, the grass was only feet away. Then she could make a run for Rachel’s house, again anticipation flushed through her veins.Feeling a sharp pain shoot through her torso a loud thud filled her ears caung her to scream, his knife had torn through her abdomen and was stopped by the steel nk. Feeling blood begin to travel up her esophagus she attempted to cry out once more, viciously he tore the knife from her body and pulled her back onto the tile floor. Barely able to breath Leah watched as he stood over her, she was helpless.=========================

Savagely Michael began to thrust his blade into her abdomen, before tearing the knife from the wound he made sure to carve into her body. Slowly her screams faded as her organs became exposed, tilting his head to the de Michael examined his work. Pleased with himself he bent down and gripped her hair, dragging her lifeless body through the living room he made a blood trail back up the stairway.=========================tting in the empty restaurant made Laurie recognize how empty the town actually was tonight, bedes her group there were three other tables in the dinning room. It had been fun so far, there hadn’t been a dull moment yet. Tina was trying to keep her words as clean as posble around Emily, Rachel kept making her ster try different foods, and of course Andrew was making Laurie laugh. Bedes the holiday they were celebrating today was just short of perfect.After finishing up dinner Rachel took Emily into the restroom to help her with her costume, Tina and Chris headed outde to smoke, Laurie and Andrew followed with Steven.“Do you think she has been enjoying her night,” Chris asked.

“Hell yeah,” Tina took a drag from her cigarette. “We all have, its been great so far.”

“Plus that dinner was amazing,” Steven replied holding his stomach with joy.

“It really was good,” Andrew responded. “But now is going to be her favorite part, getting candy.” He smiled at this statement.

“Well at least we arent going to be ‘checking’ the candy for razors or anything.” Tina shook her head.

“Your parent’s did that to you to,” Andrew asked.

“Oh yeah, take my bag and grab all the name brand candy. They were bitches,” Tina laughed.

“Yeah, I always lost about twenty Snickers when my parents ‘checked’ my bag.” Laurie smiled remembering her mother and father.“I guess every kids parents did that to them, I mean it is free candy.” Chris inhaled the smoke from his cigarette.

“When I have my own kids im going to make sure and check their Twix,” Steven joked.

“Make sure to pull out some Skittles for me when you do,” Tina winked at her boyfriend.

“Who said I was having kids with you,” Steven replied.The group laughed at this comment, Laurie shook her head and looked to her right. A pale face peaked around the corner of the restaurant at her, hearing footsteps as the face disappeared Laurie’s heart fluttered. As her friends continued to joke Laurie stepped away from the group unnoticed. Taking a deep breath she held on tight to the wooden wall, taking her time she began to look around the corner.Suddenly someone grabbed her, they were digging into her stomach making growling noises. With a slight scream Laurie jumped back, looking down she seen Emily smiling. She had her hair damp with fake blood, a piece of fake flesh dangled from her cheek, fake veins were pushing against her pale skin. Rachel did a great job with the make up.

“I could be a special effects artist with this talent I know,” Rachel appeared from behind a tree. Still laughing from her plan to scare Laurie, she stopped, “What is wrong?”

“Nothing, she looks amazing. I just thought I saw someone else.” Laurie smiled at Emily.

Rachel could tell by the expreson on her friends face what Laurie was thinking, watching as her ster walked away with her Rachel looked around. She could feel someone watching them, and she hoped Laurie was wrong in what she saw. Not sure exactly what to be searching for Rachel stopped, by the dark trash bin she could make out a face. Taking a step forward she tried squinting to see farther in the distance. What she thought was a pale face had sunk into the dark. ================================

Watching as Rachel searched for him Michael receded into the darkness, and took in her actions. She had a strong dispotion, ready for what ever she may find. With a deep breath Michael tilted his head to the de, this could make for an interesting night.================================Waiting at the bottom of the steps for Emily to receive her candy Laurie took in the decorations from this house, it was one of the few that were actually handing out candy. There was a witch hanging from a tree tting on a broom, spider web covered their entire left de of the yard. Huge spiders were strolled throughout with fake human remains and strobe lights, the other de had multiple tombstones with zombie hands protruding from the soil. Moans could be heard and mechanical zombies were pulling their torso’s around the yard. A skeleton was hanging from their other tree with a rope around his neck, their porch was covered in orange lights. Multiple jack-o-lanturns sat on the railing, one was attached to a fake human body. Their intestines were trailing over the chair it was tting in, it was a shame more people couldn’t see this tonight.“I feel like we should decorate more for Halloween,” Rachel leaned in to mumble in Laurie’s direction.

“You and me both,” Laurie continued to stare at the detail.

“Thank you,” Emily could be heard telling the lady as she descended the steps.

“Okay Emily, one more. Then we are going to go home so Dad can come pick you up,” Rachel spoke to her little ster.

“Aww, Rachel.” Emily whined.

“Honey we have searched for every house we can,” Rachel stooped down to her sters eye level.

“I know,” Emily looked inde her surpringly full bag.

“Okay, two more then we are going home.” Rachel gave in to her ster.

“Yay!” Emily skipped off.

“Emily wait,” Rachel jogged after her.

Laurie was smiling as she walked behind them, watching as Emily tripped into one of the potholes Laurie ran to catch up.

“Are you okay,” Rachel was already helping her ster from her fall.

“Yeah, my candy fell out though.” Emily had a disappointed look on her face.

“Here we will help get all of it,” Laurie started searching for the fallen candy.Surprised at how far the candy had gone Laurie knelt down to pick up a piece of chocolate, hearing foot steps she glanced up. In the distance a tall, dark figure was walking towards her. Trying to make sure her eyes weren’t playing tricks on her with the dark Laurie blinked, still the figure was there. Grabbing the candy she ran back to Rachel.

“Rachel,” Laurie screamed.

“Whats wrong,” Rachel asked concerned.

Andrew and the others pulled up in the SUV, Laurie took a look back to see where the figure was now. To her relief it was gone, smiling at Emily she placed the candy in her bag.

“Nothing, I was just trying to catch up to you guys.” Laurie lied.

Rachel stared at her, not believing the words Laurie said she began to look around.“Look what we got,” Tina rolled down the window.“Everclear huh,” Rachel shook her head.========================

Watching as his ster and friends gathered in the vehicle Michael waited, the car began to drive forward. Slowly he turned his masve frame around and made his way back to Laurie’s neighborhood.========================

Standing next to a tree across the street Michael watched as a car pulled up to Rachel’s house, the little girl then ran outde with her. After a short conversation Rachel walked back into her house and the car drove off, turning his attention to the window he watched as his ster walked up the stairs with three of her friends. Looking back at the living room window he could see as two of them remained downstairs.========================

Finishing up the jack-o-lanturn Tina began to light the candle and gently placed it in the hollow pumpkin. Cautiously Steven lifted the pumpkin off the counter, the two of them made their way to the front door. Tina reached up and turned off the porch light before opening the entrance for her boyfriend. Carefully he took his first step onto the porch, slowly he placed the bottom of the pumpkin on the railing.“This looks awesome,” Tina admired their work as Steven turned the pumpkin toward the street. “Definitely the best pumpkin we have made,” Tina smiled at Steven.

Suddenly she felt a hand grab hold of her jacket, vigorously she was tossed into the wall. Instantly her ght became blurred as her head bounced off the wood, she could feel her weight being supported by her holder. Again she was tossed, this time landing on the living room floor.Steven attempted to cry out for help as he witnessed his girlfriend being manhandled, his attempt however was futile. The beast of a man had his hand clasped tightly around his neck in a matter of seconds. A faint crack came from his throat as the man tightened his grip beyond belief, with ease the masked man started to haul Steven into the house. Letting go of his throat he gripped his hair and started to lift him off the ground. Steven attempted to cry out to Tina, only to hear a slight squeal. The powerful grip of the mans hand had crushed his larynx.Watching from the floor Tina began to regain her senses, studying her boyfriends futile attempt to scream her name she tried making it to her feet; The vertigo was still overwhelming. Taking another glance at her boyfriend she watched in horror as the monstrous man impaled his throat with the knife. Steven’s eyes widened with pain, violently the man tore the blade to the other end of his neck almost decapitating him. A light scream escaped as Tina watched him toss the body ade like a wet towel.Reaching her feet she attempted to run for the back door. Stopping after her first step she felt severe pain flush through her body, looking down at her abdomen she could see the blood stained steel protruding from her flesh. Her legs gave out as he tore the blade from her spine, falling to the floor she tried moving her left leg. To her horror the limb wasn’t responding, feeling his hand grip her hair she screamed. Effortlessly she felt him lift her weight as he tossed her over the end table. Landing on top the accent table against the wall she could feel as the structure caved under the pressure of her limp body. Feeling the glass tear into her flesh she cried, within seconds she felt his hands grip her neck. Instantly her oxygen flow was interrupted, looking up into the hollow eyes of the mask she cried.Again he swung the knife down, imbedding the steel into her frame. Repeating this action again she could feel as his grip tightened, savagely he hurled her head against the wall. Feeling as the dry wall cracked under her cheek she cried out, tosng her to the floor once more he stopped momentarily. Feeling the pain vibrate through her body she cried, not being able to move her legs she tried reaching forward. Again her limbs didn’t cooperate, and the tears began to flow quicker. Her cheek was torn open, her nose was gushing blood, her head felt too large for her neck and the stab wounds were pulng with fire. As her body began to give up she felt his hands intertwine in her hair once more. His breaths were hard and terrifying, and she could feel his mask touching her face as he examined her. A sharp pain radiated from the back of her neck, slowly she could feel him press his knife through her throat. Choking on the blood that traveled up from her wound her cries transformed into gargles. Looking into his cold eyes she could feel as the blade finally ripped through the front of her neck, unaffected by his own actions she watched as he mply tilted his head to the de.================================Opening the door the four friends cautiously stepped into the hallway, the noises they had just heard were more than unsettling. Andrew held Laurie tight as they began to make their way down the stairs. As the living room became vible their stomachs turned with fear and nausea, blood painted the entire area. All of the furniture was dismembered, the gore covered wall was cracked, the carpet was stained a deep red. Steven was lying on the floor with his head hanging on by the few remaining inches of flesh on the back of his neck. Tina was lying face down in a pool of her own blood, and standing in front of the door was a colossal being.Making eye contact with her brother Laurie felt the blood drain from her face, her breaths drew short, her eyes began to water and her heart beat faded. After three years of believing he was dead, his masve figure was standing in front of her. Her knees began to shake as her weight became unbearable to support, tightly she gripped the railing to keep her balance. With his eyes never leaving hers she watched as he tossed a collection of broken phones at their feet with sadistic humor.

“Come on,” Rachel yelled at the group seeing his muscles twitch towards them.

The four of them ran back up stairs with no where to go, and hearing his heavy footsteps travel closely behind them their bodies flinched with panic. Slamming the door shut Laurie took a look around, violently the door was almost thrust open by Michael’s power. Andrew and Chris quickly pushed the heavy dresser in front of the doorframe.“Go through the window,” Laurie screamed.

Swiftly Rachel unlocked the window and forced it open, elbowing the screen from its secure location she watched as it fell fifteen feet to the ground.

Caving in the door, Michael effortlessly kicked the dresser out of his way. Trying to avoid the wooden structure Laurie fell to the floor and began to back away. As Michael reached for Laurie Andrew quickly grabbed a pair of scissors from Rachel’s desk, forcefully he impaled the metal blades into Michael’s chest. Tearing the blades from his body, and thrusting his forearm into Andrews torso, Michael’s force lifted him off his feet. Colliding with a ngle shelf secured on the wall he broke through it.In seconds Laurie was by his de helping Andrew to his feet.

“Rachel jump,” She screamed.

Chris began to squeeze through the splintered door, Michael viciously swung the knife into his de. Gripping his head Michael lifted him off his feet and placed his other hand around his mouth, with a loud grunt Michael forced Chris head forward. The x inch metal bracket remaining on the wall from the torn down shelf pierced through Chris’s skull, removing his hands from his victim Michael momentarily watched as he dangled above the floor. Blood began to drip from his eye as his lifeless body twitched.

“Chris,” Rachel yelled in pain.

Forcing Rachel to climb out of the window Laurie then helped Andrew do the same.

“Go ill catch up,” Laurie yelled. “Run,” she watched as her friends left while placing her feet on the storm drain.

Looking back at the drop that awaited her Laurie gripped the window stool, taking a breath she began to jump. Feeling as Michael gripped the shoulder of her shirt she screamed, with his free hand he lifted his astonishingly long blade. Feeling the storm drain cave under her feet Laurie’s weight ripped the shirt from Michael’s hands. With the unexpected fall caung Michael to miss her chest she felt as his blade tore into her shoulder and ripped down her arm. Landing hard on the grass Laurie laid motionless for a moment, it was hard to breath after the collion. Her arm was screaming in pain, and her innards felt as if they were torn from their correct location. Forcing herself to rise she took a look at her blood covered arm, the blade had torn a wide gash in her flesh. She could see a small section of her bone where the muscle had been ripped away, applying pressure on the wound caused her to scream out in pain.

Noticing Michael was gone from the window Laurie began to search for her friends, with no one inght she knew she was alone. Seeing the back door open from her peripheral vion she began to run. If she could make it to her house maybe she could call 9-1-1, she hoped Leah had already left for the party. it was a good thing Andrew and Rachel had gotten separated, now there was a chance they could survive.Running through the neighborhood Laurie finally reached her porch, turning the knob on the front door she realized it was locked. Panic rushed through her as she took a look around, Michael was no where in ght. Running into her back yard Laurie searched for the fake rock that held the spare key, none of them seemed to be the correct finding. Just as she was about to give up she felt the hollow rock beneath her fingers, pulling they key from the compartment she unlocked the backdoor. Quietly clong it she ran to the bar in the kitchen and reached for the phone, touching the broken plastic she dropped it on the floor.“Shit,” Laurie whispered to herself.

Attempting to take a step forward she slipped, catching herself on the counter she looked down at her feet. Through the darkness she could see blood trailing through her living room, swallowing hard she drew in a breath.“Leah,” she said loud enough for herself to hear.

Slowly she took a step forward, making her way through the living room she traveled up the stairs. Keeping her feet as far away from the blood as she could she reached the landing. The red trail lead into Leah’s room, quietly crying Laurie wiped the tears away. Turning the blood covered handle she pushed the door open. Falling back against wall she covered her mouth in shock, Leah was hanging from the ceiling fan. Most of her organs and intestines were hanging over her hollowed abdomen, some had fallen onto the floor beneath her in a pool of blood.

“No,” Laurie cried in a quiet spasm.

Holding back her vomit she forced herself to enter the room, maybe Leah had left her cell phone. Touching the bloody sheets Laurie searched, seeing the charger she pulled on the cord. Picking up the phone connected to the end of the rubber cable she held it in her trembling hands, staring at the crumbled device a small cry escaped in disappointment. Dropping the phone on the bed she made her way around Leah’s carcass, slowly descending the stairs Laurie noticed the backdoor was wide open. Placing both hands over her mouth she shook her head in disbelief, he was already in the house with her.

Noticing Leah’s ster hadn’t came for her sewing supplies Laurie cautiously dropped to her knees. Quietly crawling she made her way to the couch, the only noise filling the room was the slight breeze from outde whistling into the doorway. Pulling the long, thick needle from the box she gripped it tight. Taking a final look around she began her attempt to escape through the back door. Feeling as Michael almost ripped her hair from her head, her body was pitched to the floor. With a yelp of pain Laurie fumbled to reach her feet, before she was able to move Michael had her by her throat.Grinding her teeth together at the pain Laurie began to feel for the needle she dropped. Hearing Michael’s breaths get louder she noticed he was staring into her tear filled eyes. Her face was turning red as she panicked, viciously he shook her with a growling breath. With her lungs burning Laurie was determined to find the needle, kicking her legs she could feel her brain begin to shut down. Finally feeling the cold steel graze her fingers she gripped the needle, with all the force she could muster Laurie swung the sharp point into his neck.Tearing it from his flesh she impaled him again, as his grip loosened she stabbed her brother once more. Air filled her lungs as she fell to the floor, catching herself she kicked Michael in the leg. Watching as he fell to one knee she rose to her feet, running out of the house she quickly escaped through her fence door.“Rachel,” she screamed. “Andrew!”

She wasn’t sure where she was running to, but she had to get away from Michael. Feeling as her face brushed against the low hanging branches on the trees in the alley way Laurie slowed down, looking back she couldn’t see anyone following her. Colliding with a warm body she screamed.

“Baby,” Andrew steadied her. “Are you alright,” He stared into her eyes.

Nodding her head yes Laurie began to cry, she couldn’t stand the thought of long Andrew or Rachel.

“Was that your fucking brother,” Rachel asked in tears.

Not wanting to let the cry escape Laurie nodded.

“What do we do,” Rachel asked the two of them.

“I dunno,” Andrew stated bluntly.

“The college,” Laurie whispered. “That’s were everyone is at, plus they have campus security.” Laurie looked at Andrew.

“Lets go,” Andrew pulled Laurie close as they sprinted towards the college. =====================================

Close behind his ster Michael followed. The cold October sky was broken with the flash of lightning, heavy drops of rain began to fall as the rumble of thunder unleashed them. With the rain gaining volume it became difficult to see until the sky was illuminated. Stopping across the street from campus grounds Michael watched as his prey tried to take shelter in the college. ====================================

“No one is fucking answering,” Rachel yelled as she stopped presng the call box.

“The door is too heavy to break down,” Laurie shouted over the rain.

“We can go to the roof,” Andrew replied. “The roof access door is usually left unlocked,” he pulled the girls in front of him.Looking around Laurie couldn’t make anything out through the rain, as the lightning struck once more she could see the glow off the white mask in the distance. Finding the ladder they quickly ascended, reaching the roof they could see the door a few yards away. Sliding through the collected puddles of rain water on the roof they slowly made their way, twisting the metal handle the door didn’t budge.

“Its locked,” Laurie screamed.

“Move,” Andrew demanded as he lifted the cinder block they used to prop the door open with.

Thrusting it forward the window cracked into a spider web degn, hauling it forward once more the glass caved under the pressure. Running the concrete along the edges before tosng it behind him, he made sure the remaining glass fell from the opening. Pulling his weight up he began to slide in, falling to the small landing he tried opening the door.

“I need a key to unlock it, you’re going to have to climb through.” Andrew spoke to the girls.

“Hurry Laurie,” Rachel’s voice shook from the cold rain.

Lifting herself up she made her way in, carefully Andrew helped her finish her entrance.“Okay Rachel, come on.” Laurie yelled.

Waiting momentarily she peaked out of the window, a behemoth figure was standing in the distance.

Covering her mouth Andrew pulled Laurie close, they could see as Rachel was hiding behind the air conditioning unit. ======================================

Shivering from the rain Rachel tried to remain as still as posble, peaking around the metal structure she could see him making his way towards the access door. Placing her trembling hands into the cold water collecting beneath her she began to crawl to the other de of the unit. Taking another look she watched as he stood in the rain, his masve figure dripping with water; The blade of his knife directing a stream onto the floor. He was studying the broken window, slowly he turned his attention towards Rachel‘s direction. Had he seen her? Gripping her chest and gasping in fear she fought to remain stiff. ========================================

Huddled against the door, Andrew and Laurie sat motionless in fear. Squeezing each others hands they drew in a breath of preparation. ========================================

Gripping the door handle Michael took a look inde, seeing a dark stairwell he was sure they had made their way into the dorm rooms. Tightening his grip Michael prepared to break the door from its hinges. With the flash and sound of striking lighting Michael felt as concrete collided with his skull, the force caused his head to slam against the metal door. Disoriented Michael fell hard to his knees. =======================================

Dropping the block Rachel attempted to retreat to the ladder, long her footing on the slippery roof she felt as his hand grabbed her ankle. Pulling her from her upright potion Rachel fell face first against the concrete, followed by a sharp pain in her hip. Screaming as he ripped the knife from her body she kicked backwards connecting with his groin. Sliding through the water she rose to her feet, the rain caused the blood from the gash in her forehead to drain into her eyes.

With the ladder in reach her heart exploded with suspense, she knew he was close behind her. Reaching for the steel she felt as his enormous hand gripped her skull, with all her strength she tried evading his actions. Her attempt was no match for his, and she felt as her body was pulled backwards onto his impresve blade. Shrieking as he tore the blade from her body she was pulled back even more, landing in a puddle of water she cried out in pain. Rolling onto her back she watched as he swung his blade down, eluding his attack she rolled to the de. Grasping the air condoning unit she got to her feet. If she could put enough distance between them there was a chance she could climb into the broken window.Before she could take another step he had pierced her flesh once more, this time the impact lifted her from the ground. His fingers intertwined in her hair, she could feel her hair ripping from her skull as he held her in front of him. Pulling the blade from her back he snarled demonically as he thrust it forward once more. The paralyzing sensation was repeated, and with each successful attempt gained more power. With one last thrust he held the blade inde her and took a step forward, Rachel was still coherent enough to comprehend her surroundings. Reaching the edge of the building she could see a thirty foot fall to the ground beneath her, the only structure to stop her from reaching the grass would be the concrete steps leading up to the doorway. Feeling his grip tightened she was lifted higher, and with terrifying force propelled towards the ground.========================================

Watching as her blood covered body fell from the roof Michael took a deep breath just before her carcass collided with the pavement lightning lit up the sky. Her body landed on the thick concrete railing of the steps. Blood shot from her skull, covering the asphalt with carnage. He could see as the bones in her neck protruded through her skin, her leg was bent in an inhuman way. The vicinity surrounding her body was stained red, and not even the pouring rain was quick enough to wash it away. ========================================

Door after door the dorms were empty, and the depresng feeling that they were alone sank in.“Laurie,” Andrew looked into her eyes. “If anything happens to me, there is an old dumbwaiter in one of these halls. The frats use it as one of their hazing techniques, it only goes half way down before stopping. You can hide there,” His eyes watered as he stared at her.

Not wanting to look at him she mply nodded, everything she had worked so hard to achieve over the past three years was gone. The thought of long Andrew was something she couldn’t bare.

With nothing but the lightning to allow them to see, Laurie and Andrew stood close together. The rain was still hammering against the windows and roof, caung a steady roar making it harder to hear than usual. Finding the stairway that lead to the floor level common area was hard in the darkness, and wandering around was becoming hopeless. Shaking with anticipation the duo made their way down a dark corridor.As the lightning struck once more the room was momentarily full of light, and standing a few feet in front of them was Michael’s masve figure. As their hearts seized and their lungs tightened they backed away, rounding a corner they stopped. Again darkness swallowed the room.Slowly peaking over the bend Andrew waited for the lightning to strike once more, as the brightness flooded the room Michael was no where in ght.

“Shit,” he whispered.“He is gone isn’t he,” Laurie asked rhetorically with a lent cry.

Not answering the question he gripped her hand, the only way to the stairs was continuing through the corridor. Trying to make out shapes in the darkness they slowly made their way, clinging to the wall. In the distance they could see a faint light, slowly it got closer. Stopping to prepare themselves to run Laurie gripped Andrew’s hand. They could make out a face next to the light, a dark skinned man took another step towards them. It was apparent by his soaked uniform he was a member of the campus security.

“What the fuck is going on here,” The man held his gun next to the flashlight.“Please help,” Laurie cried in a soft whisper.The man was going over them with his light, examining their damaged state.“What is going on,” The security guard asked once more with authority.“Michael Myers is here,” Andrew replied.

The mans face hardened, they were sure he didn’t believe them.As the lightning flashed once more he could see a towering man standing behind them with a white mask, and a enormous blade lifted above them.“Move,” He yelled shooting his gun.

Laurie and Andrew fell to the ground and began to crawl away, they watched as he fired shot after shot into his figure. His heavy body hit the floor, Laurie could feel the vibration beneath her.“Are you kids okay,” the security guard took a step towards them.=======================================

Feeling as he stepped over his body Michael laid stiff, gripping the knife tight he waited.

Slowly tting up he took a look behind him, and watched as the security guard tried to comfort his ster.

“Come on, I will get you to a hospital and call the police. We need to get back to my patrol car,” the man politely gave them orders. =======================================

“Fuck,” Laurie cried.

Michael’s body was gone, knowing the bullets had no effect on him she placed her hand over her mouth to quiet her cries.

“That’s imposble,” the security guard took a step forward.Squatting down where the masked man had fallen he ran his fingers across the floor, feeling the warm liquid he took a glance at his fingers. The deep red blood dripped from their tips, standing he turned towards the others.

“What is it,” Laurie asked.

The security guard was standing still, staring at them without saying a word. Slowly he moved, his body was being lifted in the air. Blood began to pour from his mouth, his body twitched with pain. Lightning stuck once more, and Michael‘s white mask could be seen behind him. Ripping the blade from his back the body fell to the floor, and Michael took a step forward.With Michael blocking the stairway, they had no where to go. Turning down a hallway Andrew tried opening one of the doors, to their dismay it was locked. Before they could try the next door Michael had his hands around Andrew’s shoulders, screaming Laurie backed away.

“Run,” Andrew yelled as he tried to escape Michael’s hold.

Shoving him onto his knees Michael forced his head downward, holding the knife to where the blade’s edge was underneath his fingers Michael began to carve into his neck. The pain flourished through Andrew’s veins, he could hear as his flesh gave away to the steel. He could feel the grinding in his teeth as Michael to slice into his bone, and slowly everything began to fade. ==================================

Tearing his head off the rest of the way Michael tossed it at Laurie as she ran. His hands were dripping with blood, his breaths were heavy with excitement. She was all alone now. ==================================

Rushing into one of the open doors Laurie realized she was trapped, and hiding was her only option. Running to the bi-fold closet door she stepped inde, the closet was empty except for a few articles of clothing hanging. Pulling the pole from its socket she forced it into the doorway, caung it to stand diagonal. This would help to stop the doors from opening inward. Sliding down the wall she began to cry to herself, she knew it was up to her to end this. Noticing how quiet it had been she looked up at the closet doors, maybe he wasn’t able to find her.The loud boom of striking lighting jolted Laurie’s nerves, and with the illumination she could see Michael’s masve shadow standing in front of the closet. Hearing as the doors attempted to open her heart fell to her stomach, frantically she began to look around for a way out. Feeling her elbow touch cold metal she looked down, a large air vent next to her tting body.With a loud grunt Michael’s fist broke through the door, caung her to scream. He began to effortlessly cave in the wood and reach forward. With his hand only a few feet away from her she began to twist the bolts on the vent, she could hear as he continued to tear the closet door down. To her relief his masve body was too large to fit under the pole, and with the last bolt falling to the floor she tore the vent from the wall.

Crawling forward she heard as he made his way into the closet, and within seconds his hand was wrapped around her calf. Screaming with panic she began to kick, still his strength overpowered hers. Feeling the blade begin to saw into the flesh above her ankle she yelped in pain, with her free leg she kicked upwards. =====================================

Feeling his sters strike Michael released his grip, blood began to drain from his broken nose. Staring down at the floor he watched as the drops began to stain the carpet, and with a burning rage he began to tear into the wall. ====================================

Hearing the commotion behind her Laurie started to crawl faster, she knew if he could reach her once more she was going to die. Finding another vent she began to push the metal, she could feel as it started to give in. As the vent fell to the floor she pulled herself from the opening, noticing Michael’s savage actions had stopped so did her heart. Quickly opening the door she ran into the hallway, built inde the wall was the dumbwaiter Andrew had told her about.Opening the sliding door she looked into the old wooden box, it was scratched in several places. It looked as if it was used to move small pieces of furniture, with no other apparent option she climbed inde. Presng the small button located on the wall she closed the sliding door, it began to descend at a painfully slow rate. The wood began to moan, the rope began to creek as the old mechanism began to work. Feeling the box shake as if they came to an abrupt stop, Laurie braced herself. Feeling as the dumbwaiter continued its slow movement her heart sank, and with a loud crack Michael’s knife broke through the top of the crate.Hearing as he began to viciously tear into the structure Laurie began to panic, if it didn’t reach the next level she was trapped; easy prey for her hunter. She could feel as the dumbwaiter’s pulley was being tested, the weight of Michael and herself was becoming to much. The wood began to dig into the rails, and with a loud moan the dumbwaiter stopped.The knife continued to tear into the wood, and Michael’s loud grunting was unnerving. She could begin to see his mask through the holes he created, and watched as he started to rip the wood up with his bare hands. Noticing a small amount of light coming from a crack in front of her she lifted the dumbwaiters door, there was a small opening leading to the next floor. The pulley system gave a little more, and the miniature elevator sank further down. The opening was just large enough for her to squeeze through, feeling as his fingers wrapped inde her hair she screamed. Pulling with all her might she could feel her hair being ripped from their follicles.Reaching forward she could feel the floor, pulling harder she began to slip out. His knife was grazing her skin, and his fingers were inches away. The dumbwaiter shifted once more and the soft bounce forced her out, a loud crash filled the room. Inches away from her face was her brothers large hands, he finally broke through the crate. Crawling backwards she noticed a fire axe on the wall.

Ring to her feet she bravely threw her elbow in the glass, feeling as it cracked she moaned in suspense. Again she tossed her elbow forward, this time the glass caved; shredding her skin as her arm entered. Gripping the heavy axe she pulled it from its holder. Swinging it down it stopped in her brothers flesh, the steel was buried in his back. Ripping it from the wound she lifted it once more, swinging it down again it tore into the flesh right below his neck.Feeling the dumbwaiter collapse further she realized he was close to entering the room, again she hauled the axe towards his body. Feeling as it stopped she looked down, his hand was clasped around the metal handle. Pulling it from her grip he impaled the pick into leg, crumbling to her knees Laurie screamed in pain. Pulling the axe from deep gash in her leg she looked forward, she was unbelievably close to her brother. Before she could escape his reach he swung the knife forward, it tore into her collar bone; barely misng her neck.

Gripping her fresh wound she felt as the blood started to pour from the slice, she felt as if she couldn’t continue to fight. If she had been any closer he would have ended her life. Her body was weak, her spirit had been broken, everyone she cared about was massacred in front of her. What was there left to live for?

Again the dumbwaiter fell, and the opening was almost enough for Michael to be able to escape. Realizing her life was too important to give up she gripped the axe once more and watched as he fought to reach her, his knife swinging, his hands reaching. With a angry scream she plunged the axe down once more, the heavy blade severed half of his hand. His knife fell to the floor in front of her, and blood began to paint the area. His hand was twitching, and his determination to reach her was coming to a boiling point. She watched as he put all his energy into breaking through the opening. Changing her attention to the dumbwaiter she could see the rope that was holding it in place, the rails were bending, and the rope was slowly tearing apart. With a final swing she cut through the thick plies of the rope.Instantly the dumbwaiter collapsed, and Michael’s body fell inward. The heavy metal rim of the box crushed into Michael’s neck. Blood gushed as it tore through, Michael’s eyes widened. Falling to the floor Laurie screamed, she couldn’t believe it didn’t decapitate him. His head was spasming, blood was seeping from the holes of the mask. Ferociously she began to kick the wall, trying to force the dumbwaiter to fall. With a squishing crack the heavy box fell to bottom story. Blood covered the wall, dust was flung into the air from the impact of the crate, and rolling towards her was the severed head of her brother.

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To Read Part TWO Click HERE http://www.horrorbid.com/forum/viewtopic.php?f=279&t=22078

To Read Part ONE Click HERE http://www.horrorbid.com/forum/viewtopic.php?f=279&t=21994

JohnCorley92 Wednesday 10/03/2012 at 10:49 PM | 96828

ApexCarnivore Thursday 10/04/2012 at 04:05 AM | 96847

JohnCorley92 Thursday 10/04/2012 at 02:31 PM | 96851

irish16lep Thursday 10/04/2012 at 04:17 PM | 96853

THIS WAS AWSOME!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! i myself did notice the smiliarities you put from the other movies into this story and I liked it.

I was hoping to be able to comment on them first but i took long sorry lol. I also realized too that wasn't the dumbwaiter and Laurie climbing through it or something from Jamie being stuck in the shaft from H5? I just noticed that as well and I got to say the best part was Michael throwing the head of her boyfriend at her. I asked my wife what she would do and fell if someone just tore my head off and tossed at her and she said she wouldn't know.

You are motivating me to come up with a story myself, and till I saw these stories I didn't know you could publish like that on this te.

GOOD STUFF. you had my heart pacing so much when I was reading this part that when I was at the doctors office and they called my name I just jumped up startled

I am thrilled that you liked it, it means so much for people to really understand and appreciate this!! I am also glad you liked my milarities! I didnt exactly think of that when i wrote the dumbwaiter scene, but now that you have pointed it out...it does fit =p It was just one of the best parts about H20 and it gave me the opporitunity to have her enclosed in a tiny area with him trying to get to her...SUSPENSE! It also gave me a way to end my story ;) Im SO glad i have inspired you to write more, i myself didnt know about publishing on this te...but they have been MORE than supportive throughout this story and its all safe. They have it kind of under copywrite laws...so no one can steal anything youve written! im glad it was intense for you to read! Thats what i was going for!! I myself enjoy writing it for the intenty but i cant really tell how anyone else will take it...its nice to see that someone found it as thrilling as i did =) Thank you so much for the support on my story! Im SO glad you liked it!! I would also love to know what you thought about my actual end to the story...i know some people might not like my choice to end it how i did...but i thought that Halloween deserved a trilogy that came full circle ya know?

JohnCorley92 Thursday 10/04/2012 at 04:33 PM | 96854

This was really good. Honestly, I loved the whole thing, except three items were kind of re-used. 1. and 2. are the names of Laurie's friends: Tina and Rachel (just like in H4 and H5 back in the 1980's). I would've used two different names for them. 3. The needle in Leah and Laurie's house, same as in the first Halloween. I know if this would be made into the movie, those three things I pointed out would be most likely changed. Other than that, really well done! 4.3/5 stars

Im really glad you commented on about that, i was waiting for someone to finally say something!

I want to first say that everyone hated H2 (myself included) because it didnt feel like a Halloween movie, it seemed to have lost the entire atmosphere and theme. Rob strayed away to the point that if he wasnt wearing the mask in the beginning of the movie it could have been a completely different series (if not an original stand alone film...Like the original H3)

There was also some backlash at his first attempt at remaking the original, and while i personally LOVED H1 i understand why some people didnt.

Which brings me to why i wanted to incorporate some of the original series into my veron of part three. All in all i was paying homage to the original films with what i put in here. I wanted you to feel like you were getting more of the proper remake you didnt get with the last two entries. I wanted to keep his brutality, but as you read in my story Michael was very much a shadow stalker...who played with his victims. In Rob Zombie's he wasnt that way, especially in H2...i wanted to bring back a little of what made him scary to me as a child watching 1-8

With Tina and Rachel i wanted to give you a little bit of familiarity, someone you could instantly connect with (for the people that watch the originals) and see them reinvented. This was also a way to stick with the remake theme, much like having Annie and Linda was in H1.

So my goal was to give my audience a decent and smart story, that made made you think you knew what was going to happen (because you watched the originals) and then turn it on its head a bit.

You missed some other things i threw in there, including Laurie's trade mark wound...i sliced her arm open! Different scenario, worse injury...but it was another homage.

So while yes this is an original idea, i drew a lot of inspiration from H4 and H20...and i wanted it to be present when you read it.

I felt that after H2 we needed somewhat of a redemption, and i wanted to give a good scary Michael Myers tale...not some giant hobo who was being led around by vions of his dead mother -.-

Im glad you like it, i really put alot of thought into this...i would love to know what you thought of the way i ended the entire thing as well...=)

You're right, I didn't notice the homage you paid to Laurie's wound in the Original Halloween. Expertly done. I did kinda of realize that this would be a remake, so the Rachel, Tina, and needle parts I pointed out shouldn't have effected my rating on this. Sorry. I know actually loved the idea of paying homage to the clasc Halloweens! Rob zombie didn't use the needle part in any of his two remakes, so it's justice for it to be in this one! I have to say, I loved the ending! I loved the way Michael

died! I wouldn't like to see him die so I know that somewhere in the future there could be another film,

but I am glad he's dead. "There is no boogeyman!"- Beth, H6 (The Curse). lol He deserved no better death than the one he got!!! Plus, I read this at around 1:00 A.M. Eastern Time, right before I went to sleep and it was really dark, so it scared the crap out of me...in a good way! Loved it! 4.8/5 Stars

Your ending inspires me to write a continuance of this part. It would have to be more SciFi than anything, the way to bring him back to life that is, and it probably wouldn't appeal to a lot of people as this one would. Still, an idea. If you would like to do something like that, let me know. We could co-write something, who knows? One last thing, I really think you should take this to Universal and get it made into a movie! I know it would be a long process and they would probably mess with your script for sure, but it would be cool if this was a movie and to see your name in the End Credits. I'd watch this in a heartbeat!

ApexCarnivore Thursday 10/04/2012 at 06:13 PM | 96856

You're right, I didn't notice the homage you paid to Laurie's wound in the Original Halloween. Expertly done. I did kinda of realize that this would be a remake, so the Rachel, Tina, and needle parts I pointed out shouldn't have effected my rating on this. Sorry. I know actually loved the idea of paying homage to the clasc Halloweens! Rob zombie didn't use the needle part in any of his two remakes, so it's justice for it to be in this one! I have to say, I loved the ending! I loved the way Michael

died! I wouldn't like to see him die so I know that somewhere in the future there could be another film,

but I am glad he's dead. "There is no boogeyman!"- Beth, H6 (The Curse). lol He deserved no better death than the one he got!!! Plus, I read this at around 1:00 A.M. Eastern Time, right before I went to sleep and it was really dark, so it scared the crap out of me...in a good way! Loved it! 4.8/5 Stars

Your ending inspires me to write a continuance of this part. It would have to be more SciFi than anything, the way to bring him back to life that is, and it probably wouldn't appeal to a lot of people as this one would. Still, an idea. If you would like to do something like that, let me know. We could co-write something, who knows? One last thing, I really think you should take this to Universal and get it made into a movie! I know it would be a long process and they would probably mess with your script for sure, but it would be cool if this was a movie and to see your name in the End Credits. I'd watch this in a heartbeat

Im glad you now like the homage idea i was going for, and thank you for thinkning i did it in a clever way ;)

im glad you liked the ending! I wanted it to seem final, and painful at that..i knew from the beginning i would have to decapitate him...and i also knew i didnt want it to be the same as H20 (with an axe) although it was my plan for the audience to expect her to chop his head off with the axe =p I know what you mean about wanting another film and for Michael to live on forever...i myself am on the fence when it comes to this statement. You can only do so much with the given story ya know?? I mean take away 3-6 and just watch 1,2 and H20...PERFECT triliogy that was FINAL! Add in part 8 and they had to kill Laurie off just so it would feel like a different movie ya know?? Perhaps there is ways around this, but i like the idea of Halloween having a trilogy that ends it. It warms my heart (in a weird horror fan way) that it scared you! Its the ENTIRE reason why i wrote this (and hope it becomes a movie). I want Halloween to be scary again, and Robs H2 didnt scare me in the slightest way =/ Thank you for the rating! It shows i kept a true Halloween fan happy!

All the power to you, if you think you can come up with something that would be a great continuation be my guest! You could also go a demonic way as well...if you get where im heading with this =) I have MANY stories in my head so who knows what you or i or both of us could come up with =)

I really am wanting this to happen, i think im going to try and send this to Dimenon...or the Weinstines (SPELL CHECK??) I know that they would like another entry in their cash cow series...i just kind of hope they keep the ending...i mean

look how well H20 did...the biggest in the series (until the remake)

So thank you for the support! it means the world to me! And it honors me that you enjoyed reading this!

JohnCorley92 Thursday 10/04/2012 at 06:47 PM | 96857

ApexCarnivore Thursday 10/04/2012 at 06:53 PM | 96858

Oh believe me, I REALLY enjoyed it. I'm going to tell my Horror friends about it. Definitely a good read! I hope they take in your story here and turn it into a movie! Good luck to you!Thank you, i need all the exposure i can get! I sent it in to the Weinstines(Spell Check) on their FaceBook...its was the only way to get ahold of them...so maybe i will hear something =)

JohnCorley92 Thursday 10/04/2012 at 07:05 PM | 96860

ApexCarnivore Thursday 10/04/2012 at 07:22 PM | 96861

M. K. Summerford Thursday 10/04/2012 at 10:23 PM | 96862

Jesus Christ that was epic! Loved the ending. Very creative loved the homage parts. To be honest, what I didn't like about the ramakes at first, was that I wanted the series to continue. Watching 4, 5, and 6 made me think what if he went on so long that his blood dried up, and there was nothing left running through his veins but cold, undieing hatred? But, anyways, I hope the Weinsteins accept the story, mate.

i would first like to respond by saying that i love you used the word "epic" to describe my ending! Thank you for supporting my story from the beginning, i just hope it all turned out to be worth the wait! I think the responses so far have been overwhelmingly great!

I like how you thought of the original series, it did kind of seem that way...

I think i would die if they chose my story as the next installment in the saga! It would be my greatest honor! I have always wanted to make a Halloween movie!

Also, to everyone who has read this, i would love to know your favorite part of the story! Especially your favorite kills ;)

JohnCorley92 Thursday 10/04/2012 at 11:27 PM | 96867

ApexCarnivore Friday 10/05/2012 at 12:32 AM | 96870

My favorite part was when Michael threw Andrew's head and Laurie! xD That was hilarious!!! Shows that even the most evilest of souls can have a sense of humor! My favorite kill was when Michael killed Andrew, tore his head right off the dude's shoulders!!....than threw it at Laurie! xD My other favorite part was when Michael escaped. His escape was really planned out and methodical.

Im glad yall seem to like that part of the story, i was iffy on putting it in there =p

I wanted Michael to be a shadow stalker...but i wanted him to be vicious when he struck his prey...that way all the suspense was followed up by grusome deaths ;)

You liked his escape from the funeral home?? Thank you for saying it was planned out well and methodical ;) Sure Michael was thinking it...and did it...but i wrote it ;) LoL

JohnCorley92 Friday 10/05/2012 at 01:50 AM | 96872

ApexCarnivore Friday 10/05/2012 at 01:55 AM | 96873

I really liked the ending.

Makes me want to t down and write but every time I get to that point I just get a brain fart on what to write.

I've started so many stories and movie scripts that I just never finish them.

All the things I've written are gone though over the years.

I miss my binder with all my horror movie collection stuff I did as a kid growing up.

I had story after story written in it, and each section I had detailed labled out descriptions of serial killers, and for some reason I always stuck to certains ones and I would pair them up in groups through out my stories and then sometimes make them fight or team up against the heroes. It was a lot of fun.

There is a lot of work just to let you know trying to get into the movie script area. So goodluck. need any advice message me and I can try to help you with the best of my knowledge.

I got script writing software called Celtx. its not the best but gets the shit done.

if your ever interested in posbly teaming up on a story we could email back and forth like you start it out or i start it out and go from there. just an idea let me know. probably be best for you to start it out cause i just have constant brain farts like write now i want to start but i know i can't unless an idea comes to motivate me

irish16lep Friday 10/05/2012 at 01:56 AM | 96874

JohnCorley92 Friday 10/05/2012 at 03:54 AM | 96878

Lol, yeah. But still really awesome. I loved the shadow stalking. It was awesome

I wanted there to be alot of story...i wrote a alternate veron of Robs H2 and it was non stop action! Like from start to finish with just a little breather...it would have made for one hell of a movie tho!

JohnCorley92 Friday 10/05/2012 at 03:56 AM | 96879

UberJason78 Sunday 10/07/2012 at 01:12 PM | 96901

I love the story John! too bad there isn't an epilogue or something, but the suspense and horror is very well done. Yes this third act has some references to Halloween 1 and also Halloween H20, but could make a good movie. Again, while reading your story, I can see the things happen as if it was a real movie..Scout Taylor Compton, and Tyler Mane fit in very good;-)

Thank you, thank you =)

My brother wanted more closure, he wanted me to show everything was okay and all this...but i feel that you dont need more than i wrote...at least i dont =p I think it would be alot more intense and surpring to end it just like that (if it ever became a movie) rather than some happy ending...this ending was very dramatic. Although im sure everyone, myself included, would like to spend more time in this world =)

Im glad you could see the referenses, i really drew alot of inspiration from Halloween 4 and H20 (because those were the legit sequels to the original movies) and one thing that made H20 so great was that it took everything you knew about the original 2 movies and paid tribute to them while turning it on its head and making them different...and i know alot of people felt cheated with Robs movies so i wanted to give everyone something to enjoy in my story...bedes a good horror story =) Whats better than Michael walking around killing everyone? Right?

Its awesome that you can see whats happening while you read it, it means one of two things. One youre a big halloween fan and two that i did my job as a writer =) Its awesome you all think i made Laurie and Michael's personalities as good as they could get =)

So, thank YOU for the support through out me writing this story. And reading all 4 enteries =) I know it probably felt like a long time coming =p

JohnCorley92 Sunday 10/07/2012 at 05:05 PM | 96903

horrorfan85 Sunday 10/07/2012 at 06:53 PM | 96905

This was really good. Honestly, I loved the whole thing, except three items were kind of re-used. 1. and 2. are the names of Laurie's friends: Tina and Rachel (just like in H4 and H5 back in the 1980's). I would've used two different names for them. 3. The needle in Leah and Laurie's house, same as in the first Halloween. I know if this would be made into the movie, those three things I pointed out would be most likely changed. Other than that, really well done! 4.3/5 stars

Im really glad you commented on about that, i was waiting for someone to finally say something!

I want to first say that everyone hated H2 (myself included) because it didnt feel like a Halloween movie, it seemed to have lost the entire atmosphere and theme. Rob strayed away to the point that if he wasnt wearing the mask in the beginning of the movie it could have been a completely different series (if not an original stand alone film...Like the original H3)

There was also some backlash at his first attempt at remaking the original, and while i personally LOVED H1 i understand why some people didnt.

Which brings me to why i wanted to incorporate some of the original series into my veron of part three. All in all i was paying homage to the original films with what i put in here. I wanted you to feel like you were getting more of the proper remake you didnt get with the last two entries. I wanted to keep his brutality, but as you read in my story Michael was very much a shadow stalker...who played with his victims. In Rob Zombie's he wasnt that way, especially in H2...i wanted to bring back a little of what made him scary to me as a child watching 1-8

With Tina and Rachel i wanted to give you a little bit of familiarity, someone you could instantly connect with (for the people that watch the originals) and see them reinvented. This was also a way to stick with the remake theme, much like having Annie and Linda was in H1.

So my goal was to give my audience a decent and smart story, that made made you think you knew what was going to happen (because you watched the originals) and then turn it on its head a bit.

You missed some other things i threw in there, including Laurie's trade mark wound...i sliced her arm open! Different scenario, worse injury...but it was another homage.

So while yes this is an original idea, i drew a lot of inspiration from H4 and H20...and i wanted it to be present when you read it.

I felt that after H2 we needed somewhat of a redemption, and i wanted to give a good scary Michael Myers tale...not some giant hobo who was being led around by vions of his dead mother -.-

Im glad you like it, i really put alot of thought into this...i would love to know what you thought of the way i ended the entire thing as well...=)

On H2, I have totally changed my view on that film. I hated it, when it first came out, after a few years I love H2 now. Now the flashbacks, the white horse, and Dr Loomis character change is the only thing I hate about H2, which are key points of H2. Apart from that, its a fantastic Halloween film. H2 is my third fave film behind the remake and the original, The remake is my fave of all the Halloween films, I preferred the overall characters and style of the film.

Now back to H2, compare it to the horrible sequels of Halloween, Halloween 2, 4, 5, H20, resurrection, they are abysmal sequels. 4 was good, but the mask of Myers and his phyque ruins the film. H2 blows all the sequels out of the water, and it makes sense for most of the time, Laurie is mentally a broken girl, Myers would end up looking like this, no clue about washing, not cutting his hair, and changing his image up to blend in as impersonating a hobo makes sense, like the quote from Dr Samuel Loomis in Halloween remake (The darkest souls are not those which choose to exist within the hell of the abyss, but those which choose to break free from the abyss and move lently among us) his Hobo image lives up to this title, as they know what he looks like if he looked the same in the remake. Myers is a vessel hell bent on destruction, and coming back for his ster, so we see what the aftermath's done to Laurie, and the PPL around her

Who ever does do a Halloween film, do not go and take the best bits of H20 and the original, make it their own. But like I said, Michael Myers cannot go back to the 5 foot 10 style, as its going to be tame compared to Zombie's veron of Michael Myers. Heck H20 Myers was pethetic, getting his ass kicked by Laurie. And that god awful 90's feel really ruined it.

But no way was he scary in films 2 4 5 H20 and resurrection. He was brutal and terrifying in zombie's, look at Jason Voorhees in the remake, he was different from the others, he could run, he lived off the land, he built an entire underground shaft so he could get from A to B quicker, change is never bad for Myers. Yes Myers was different in H2, but I would like to see jamie lee curtis in H20, try and hurt Myers in the H2 veron of Michael Myers, I think he would have killed them all within an hour

horrorfan85 Sunday 10/07/2012 at 07:12 PM | 96906

JohnCorley92 Sunday 10/07/2012 at 10:37 PM | 96909

On H2, I have totally changed my view on that film. I hated it, when it first came out, after a few years I love H2 now. Now the flashbacks, the white horse, and Dr Loomis character change is the only thing I hate about H2, which are key points of H2. Apart from that, its a fantastic Halloween film. H2 is my third fave film behind the remake and the original, The remake is my fave of all the Halloween films, I preferred the overall characters and style of the film.

Now back to H2, compare it to the horrible sequels of Halloween, Halloween 2, 4, 5, H20, resurrection, they are abysmal sequels. 4 was good, but the mask of Myers and his phyque ruins the film. H2 blows all the sequels out of the water, and it makes sense for most of the time, Laurie is mentally a broken girl, Myers would end up looking like this, no clue about washing, not cutting his hair, and changing his image up to blend in as impersonating a hobo makes sense, like the quote from Dr Samuel Loomis in Halloween remake (The darkest souls are not those which choose to exist within the hell of the abyss, but those which choose to break free from the abyss and move lently among us) his Hobo image lives up to this title, as they know what he looks like if he looked the same in the remake. Myers is a vessel hell bent on destruction, and coming back for his ster, so we see what the aftermath's done to Laurie, and the PPL around her

Who ever does do a Halloween film, do not go and take the best bits of H20 and the original, make it their own. But like I said, Michael Myers cannot go back to the 5 foot 10 style, as its going to be tame compared to Zombie's veron of Michael Myers. Heck H20 Myers was pethetic, getting his ass kicked by Laurie. And that god awful 90's feel really ruined it.

But no way was he scary in films 2 4 5 H20 and resurrection. He was brutal and terrifying in zombie's, look at Jason Voorhees in the remake, he was different from the others, he could run, he lived off the land, he built an entire underground shaft so he could get from A to B quicker, change is never bad for Myers. Yes Myers was different in H2, but I would like to see jamie lee curtis in H20, try and hurt Myers in the H2 veron of Michael Myers, I think he would have killed them all within an hour

Well i hope that if you indeed did read my story, that Michael is still Zombie's Michael. However while i think Zombie's Michael is scarier, Michael was scary in the originals...yes he lost some of that as the sequels continued...but i think he was his best in 2 and H20...but he wasnt the same Michael in the original series and thrived off very different techniques. As for Laurie trying to stand up to Remake Michael is ridiculous, and that is exactly why i didnt want that in my veron of H3...it would be very unrealistic...a small girl standing up to her 7 foot tall beast of a brother? No, but that just takes me back to the fact that this is a different series now.

As for taking the best bits of H20 and the original, i wouldnt say i did that...i mply took inspiration from them. Thats like saying all Friday the 13th (remake) did was use 1-4 and made it their own...they didnt they took inspiration. Not to rip anyone off but to pay homage, that is indeed what a remake is about.

Now on to H2, i can fully appreciate the aftermath of Robs H1 and he did a decent job with it...but if you take away everything you said you didnt like about H2 you are left with maybe 30 minutes of film that yeah wouldnt be very bad...i LOVE the entire hospital scene...everything after that was too random for me...i think his vion of his dead mother, his "connection" with Laurie, his kid self really threw the movie away for me...but bedes that as a movie i was bored. Plus he went around killing just random people, and while yes i understood why...i didnt like the fact that his mother was leading him around. Then once everything came to an end Laurie wasnt really put through anything...I was bored, never jumped, and was never in suspense...I fully respect your opinion and i can understand while you like it, i just didnt think it was a good movie.

JohnCorley92 Sunday 10/07/2012 at 10:55 PM | 96910

Tyler Mane has set a new benchmark, on how to bring that terrifying presence to the Michael Myers character. While the original he was threatening, Tyler's veron felt he could rip you from limb to limb. If they ever make another Halloween film, I do hope Tyler and Malcolm both return to play Michael Myers and Dr Loomis.

Have you taken a read of my story??

I agree with you 100%!

I LOVE the original Halloween series, but watching them now i think to myself...Gah remake Michael is SO much scarier! He is HUGE, vicious, intimidating, and way more terrifying to run into on my opinion

I liked your story, I will read more into it, just giving my thoughts on the remake etc. We have seen guys in wrestling like Kane use the mute no personality character, and it does feel so much more terrifying especially when it is guys nearly 7 feet tall. On that post, if they ever do another Halloween, tyler is the man he must return for Halloween 3, he just put the power into Michael Myers that I felt was misng in the original. I think it worked well in the very first one, but they never developed Myers in Halloween 2, and he was just a walking zombie

horrorfan85 Monday 10/08/2012 at 12:15 AM | 96911

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JohnCorley92 Monday 10/08/2012 at 12:52 AM | 96913

Yeah i know what you mean about Kane, i think its totally correct that the bigger the scarier LoL

Yeah i wrote a veron of Halloween 2 for me...but like you said no wrong answer! I am glad to see that you had your own idea tho! Its like you said i would have changed some stuff too!

No i agree that Michael killed alot of random people, i just think that in H2 he killed them for no reason...it seemed that in the other Halloweens every death had a meaning ya know?? I dunno once again its just my opinion! It has been interesting discusng this with you tho! I enjoy enthuastic Halloween fans like myself :)

Halloween films is my fave horror subject to debate about, because they have so much depth to them, has much as I love Jason Voorhees, Michael is the king for me. Sorry if the spelling and grammer is complete garbage from me LOL.

I would be a complete idiot, if I said, No you are wrong and H2 was awesome, with not many flaws. There are huge problems with H2, it's continuity factor, is it's strong point. I think Annie's death, and the murders at the strip club meant something, as they connected to Michael's mother, and Laurie's friend Annie, who Laurie was staying with them. But I hated the fact, Annie seemed like she was waiting to die, as she never left the house

horrorfan85 Monday 10/08/2012 at 09:12 AM | 96920

[quote="horrorfan85 Halloween films is my fave horror subject to debate about, because they have so much depth to them, has much as I love Jason Voorhees, Michael is the king for me. Sorry if the spelling and grammer is complete garbage from me LOL.

I would be a complete idiot, if I said, No you are wrong and H2 was awesome, with not many flaws. There are huge problems with H2, it's continuity factor, is it's strong point. I think Annie's death, and the murders at the strip club meant something, as they connected to Michael's mother, and Laurie's friend Annie, who Laurie was staying with them. But I hated the fact, Annie seemed like she was waiting to die, as she never left the house

Yeah Halloween is my all timr favorite series, he is the best ;)

Dont worry about the grammar, youre fine =p

I havent been on to check this in a while, have you read anymore?? Yeah i think Annie's death meant something, everything else just seemed like filler to me. I dunno, i LOVE the beginning tho, honestly the hospital is the best part. its a shame it didnt really happen =p Im actually getting that mask pretty soon =p

JohnCorley92 Monday 10/15/2012 at 09:53 PM | 97065

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JakeRyan95 Wednesday 10/31/2012 at 04:48 AM | 97530

This ending is truely amazing, it was intense to say the least. It definitely blows Robs 1 and 2 out of the water. The whole story does actually. I like how it ends on an intense note as well. Michael is great in this story, and i really liked where you took it. If this doesnt become a movie, im sure what Hollywood has planned wont live up to it. This is great, and i cant tell you how awesome it was to read this! Your pason for the Halloween series really shines through, and it makes the story nothing short of epic. AMAZING job broIm glad you liked it so much, and thank you for saying i beat Rob ;) I really wanted it to end on an intense note, i didnt want you to be able to breath. Then bam, its over. Leaving you stunned and breathless =) I really wanted to bring some creepiness back into this beastly and brutal Michael!! Thank you for seeing my pason, i grew up with Halloween and i means alot! i can only hope Hollywood would even conder my story, afterall it is pretty epic ;) Thank you SO much for the potive feedback!

JohnCorley92 Thursday 11/01/2012 at 05:22 AM | 97550

iamthebearman Friday 11/02/2012 at 11:20 PM | 97595

I noticed you paid homage to different moments in the franchise's history. The stab wound on Laurie's arm, Laurie ung the needle to stab Michael were moments from the original Halloween, I believe. And Michael's severed head rolling made me thing of the end to H20. I liked the school scene and the lightning flashes illuminating Michael's presence... Halloween 4 in Jamie's room during her dream? The security guard being killed reminded me somewhat of how the marshal was killed towards the end of Halloween II (1981). Those were just a few homages I noticed and I thought you incorporated them well. The ending was suspenseful and dramatic and brought finality to the story with Michael being decapitated. Overall, a good story and well done. Where Laurie Strode a.k.a. Angel Myers goes from here is a mystery... All I know is she is fucked for life! Thanks for sharing.

Wow, i really expected you to review this negatively. I am anxiously waiting the full review you promised ;) I am glad you could notice and appreciate them. I did want to pay homage in a respectful and different manor than they were in the originals. I really wanted my ending to end on an intense and dramatic note. i didnt want you to have a breather at the end. i think it makes a bigger impreson. It surprises me you liked Michael dying. I really wanted Laurie to be the one to do so. i think that was the only way it was ever going to work. I wanted Brackett to be in the end, but i felt the only way to do so was to kill him...i really wanted Laurie and Brackett to be the survivors...they had been threw so much between the two of them...and as much as i wanted Brackett to have a moment with Michael it would have ended with his death.

My brother did want me to write more, give you a glimps as to what Laurie is going to do...is she going to lose it again, or is she going to be okay? Who knows, i really wanted to leave that open. However i feel that, now that she knows Michael is dead...and there is no way around it because SHE killed him, that she could finally heal. However, im sure that if this was ever made into a film, and they kept the end, they would want a 4th and probably made Michael's death a hallunation -.- However, thank you for taking the time to read this and give me your feedback!

JohnCorley92 Friday 11/02/2012 at 11:49 PM | 97596

Overall, I thought the story was good but to me, it added nothing new to the series. I would give it 3 stars out of 5. I liked how you continued from H2 and there were different directions you could have taken with Part One. I think Brackett should have had a bigger presence in the story but I can understand why you kept his role limited after Part One. I thought taking Laurie back to her original character from Halloween 2007 was a mistake because we have already been down that road. I think a new veron of Laurie different from any previous film would have been a breath of fresh air and more original but again, I can understand why you wrote the Laurie you did. You developed her friends pretty well and it was obvious they were all bait for Michael. After all, it's a Halloween story and Michael needs victims. Again, you could have gone in more original directions but the direction you took was good but not the one I would have preferred. As I mentioned after reading Part Two, I thought Laurie as a shut-in would have played better. Only because you continued from H2 and Laurie was crazy by the end of the theatrical ending. That veron of Laurie, imo, would have to be in a mental institution for a LONG time or a complete shut-in. I liked how you played Michael as a stalker and let the reader have perspective on what Michael was seeing when he stalked a victim. The kills in Part Three were good and I liked the fact Michael killed everybody and the final confrontation came down to Laurie and Michael. After taking in the whole story I think the only real flaw is that you continued the H2 storyline. As I mentioned before, I liked that you did that but it didn't work with what you were going for. You introduced new characters, a new Michael and a new town but it just didn't work for me with the incluon of H2's aftermath. I think if you started the story fresh without any influence from H2 your story would have flowed better from start to finish.

Your work is good and you have talent. You may want to think about creating a new Halloween story that is completely original from all others in the franchise. The only absolute necessary character from the franchise you need to keep is Michael Myers. What the franchise needs, in my opinion, is a new tale of Michael Myers. I think that the babytter stalker veron or the family killer veron of Michael has played its' course. A blank canvas with a completely new story line and characters is what fans are begging for. I am not criticizing your work. I liked your story but it felt too predictable to me because I've seen enough Halloween movies and I knew what you were going for. I liked that you paid homage to different films in the franchise. Once again, I think it would have worked better if it was a completely new story of Michael Myers and Halloween. I'm just offering you my honest feedback. You seem to love Halloween as much as me and you have a talent for writing. If a fresh and original idea for the franchise comes to mind, run with it. You have the pason and respect for the franchise to come up with a new idea that could transform the franchise. Good job!

iamthebearman Saturday 11/03/2012 at 01:12 PM | 97601

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JohnCorley92 Monday 11/05/2012 at 02:39 PM | 97622

I think you did a great job of creating a new story with some familiar characters as well as the included nods to past Halloween films from the series. Kudos to you! Very well thought out, intelligent continuation and a fitting end to the Halloween remake era.

Hey Ron! Its great to see you finally read all 4 parts =) Thank you for your appreciation of my story. Its nice to see that you could tell i was trying to give a more thought out and intelligent installment ;) Thank you for supporting me nce you first read the beginning bro! I hope you give my next project a chance. Im going to be writing 3 different verons of Halloween =)

JohnCorley92 Monday 11/05/2012 at 02:42 PM | 97624

Have you heard back from the Weinstiens?

M. K. Summerford Thursday 11/08/2012 at 11:02 PM | 97688

Have you heard back from the Weinstiens?

I havent, and im not really sure of another way to reach them =/ So i dunno if they just havent checked it yet or what? Im thinking if i send this to perhaprs Scout or Tyler and they like it they could have some pull

JohnCorley92 Thursday 11/08/2012 at 11:40 PM | 97690

M. K. Summerford Monday 11/12/2012 at 03:30 PM | 97736

Well no such luck from either of the 3 =/ not even a response LoL

JohnCorley92 Friday 11/16/2012 at 07:38 PM | 97812

Those bastards! :( My avatar picture sums up my response to them not looking at this great movie!

ApexCarnivore Friday 11/16/2012 at 07:45 PM | 97813

Those bastards! :( My avatar picture sums up my response to them not looking at this great movie

Haha, thanks bro!! It means alot ;) I sent it through Facebook, and Twitter...got nothing!! Its cool tho, my friends here on HB got to enjoy it =) i do have another story on here. I have two chapters posted already. Its called Ouija ;) You should check it out and tell me what you think

JohnCorley92 Friday 11/16/2012 at 08:05 PM | 97815

ApexCarnivore Friday 11/16/2012 at 08:17 PM | 97816

Thanks buddy =)

JohnCorley92 Monday 11/19/2012 at 02:38 PM | 97915

JohnathanCorley92 has wowed me. He has earned my respect. This vion of his is so right on. Any true Halloween fan would be proud. If this never gets picked up for a condered film it is a shame. Thank you for taking the time to write and share this with the horror community Johnathan. Anyone who hasn't read this entire take on H3 should do so. It's worth the read.

wabisabi333 Friday 2/01/2013 at 05:06 AM | 99924

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